TharosTheDragon's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Googol GLaDOS 2.0]

iPhone is disabled. Try again in a googol minutes. Ha ha.

[Three Skins Without Men]

A triumph of the imagination. A tour de force. A masterpiece.

I can't believe I was watching for 10 minutes. I thought I was only halfway through and then it was over.

["The Worst"]

I call it... the aristocrats!

[Epexsus Episode 1]

Cool animation, bro. The voice acting is decent, but the writing leaves much to be desired. It kind of killed it for me. Also, it's too drawn out. I think this story easily could have been told in about 5 minutes. Don't feel like longer is always better.

It kind of reminds me of Trigun how it's about a human civilization on another planet that has lost much of its technology including space travel. That's cool. I don't think it sold me enough to watch more episodes though.

[The Four Horsemen]

I like how semen is in the title.

[I'll Be There For You]

If only relationships were that easy.

[New Eden - Mating Call]

Predictable, but still fresh and original. Nice job.

[New Eden - Pilot]

Very awkward, long, and drawn out. The comedic timing is amateurish, the voices are obnoxious, and the jokes are uninspired.

I know how it must feel when you're an animator and you take a long time drawing something and you want to leave it on the screen for as long as possible so everybody gets a good long look at it, but this really needs to be faster paced. Your 6 minute cartoon feels like it's 20 minutes. The best part was the first minute when things were happening all at once and it threw stuff in your face and didn't waste your time.

I would say the quintessential sci-fi comedy cartoon is Futurama, which is saturated with jokes. It's just funny funny funny over and over again with a gag every few seconds and no boring gaps in between. Yeah, that's hard to do. But you gotta make sure you try to throw as many gags at your audience as possible and find every opportunity to do so. And don't milk just one joke because there's a chance it was never funny in the first place. The red button thing was groan-worthy. I feel like you had maybe 2 minutes worth of quality content, so drawing it out to 6 minutes makes your audience just wanna leave.

So... make the characters charming and likable, pick up the pace, don't reuse jokes, don't draw things out, and be original and inspired.

NewEdenseries responds:

Just wanted to say thanks for the feedback. All good solid criticism that we can use. Look forward to hearing what you think of the Shorts. Cheers!